It sounds like you got a lot of great feedback below, and I agree with everything obsessive24 said. Sorry that it took me so long to get back to this!
I think your instincts are excellent, and the only clip that gave me pause was the character we saw on the very first "me." That should be your POV character. Otherwise, as someone who knows nothing about this source, I was not lost in the least, and was immediately drawn in to the characters' expressions, relationships, and the mood of the song and the visuals. In other words, the first version is working beautifully for me as a recruiter vid. Change that one clip, and I would say you're on the right path.
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Date: 2011-09-26 03:54 pm (UTC)I think your instincts are excellent, and the only clip that gave me pause was the character we saw on the very first "me." That should be your POV character. Otherwise, as someone who knows nothing about this source, I was not lost in the least, and was immediately drawn in to the characters' expressions, relationships, and the mood of the song and the visuals. In other words, the first version is working beautifully for me as a recruiter vid. Change that one clip, and I would say you're on the right path.